Rebel Dream comic - 1 of 2

And now for something completely different! I've been told to try my hand at comics - by several people, over several years. I finally caved. This is the result, or rather, the first half of the result. The second page isn't quite finished yet.

It's a scene from the NJO novel Rebel Dream, by Aaron Allston, pp. 244-247. Jaina had turned her fighter around and headed back into the combat zone where Jagged Fel was facing far too many Vong ships on his own. She and Kyp, who was awesome as only Kyp can be, managed to save Jag's life, but against a direct order from Wedge, so she's in big trouble for it.

I've never done this comic thing before, so there's a good few things wrong with this. I think the second page is slightly better, which is encouraging. Jag is based, loosely, on comic pictures of Soontir Fel and Wedge Antilles. Jaina is based on Leia, also loosely. Tycho is based on Tycho and Chewie is based on Chewie; Anakin is based on no one; and Jacen is not based on any specific picture of Han because I don't need reference pictures for Han anymore.

Like I said, never done this before. I'd love - yes, love - to know what you think!

Media: Black pigment liner on sketch paper; contrast and Anakin's lightsaber fixed in Photoshop.
Time: 10 hours or so.
Dimensions: A4.
References: Rebel Dream for the script and story, obviously. Some Rogue Squadron comics for flight suits, Baron Fel, and an idea of how it's meant to be done. The cover of The Crystal Star for Chewbacca. And various pictures of spaceships, for obvious reasons.

Part 2: [link]